Post by Charlie Allison on Jan 6, 2018 21:24:48 GMT
I cut the flashback and took some of your advice as best I could. I'm now worried about the opposite problem I had initially--it feels back-loaded, rather than front loaded. I think, after one more read through, this is the version I'm gonna send out--I think it flows better and the narrative is at least straight forward. I may be stumbling for the final reason Marina does as she does but we'll see.
I removed Amur the Tall and the boarding antics because I think it just got too hard to tell the times apart.
I'd love to hear your thoughts on this--i'd love to get back into the relatively big leagues like podcastle or The Dark.
Thanks and happy new years!
Lady of Bones SMF 2018.docx (494.39 KB)
I removed Amur the Tall and the boarding antics because I think it just got too hard to tell the times apart.
I'd love to hear your thoughts on this--i'd love to get back into the relatively big leagues like podcastle or The Dark.
Thanks and happy new years!
Lady of Bones SMF 2018.docx (494.39 KB)