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Dec 6, 2016 15:20:22 GMT
Post by eldercheese on Dec 6, 2016 15:20:22 GMT
Awesome thanks a bunch Man I'll jump on these edits as soon as I can, hopefully tonight if I get home on time.
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Dec 20, 2016 3:35:46 GMT
Post by eldercheese on Dec 20, 2016 3:35:46 GMT
Trapfinal.pdf (74.26 KB) Ok so with a hopeful heart and a bit of nerves I propose a... final draft? I hope so i ended up mulling this one over quiet a bit. Here's hoping why sad grasp of grammar and spelling doesn't rear its ugly head
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Dec 27, 2016 4:16:56 GMT
Post by Charlie Allison on Dec 27, 2016 4:16:56 GMT
View AttachmentOk so with a hopeful heart and a bit of nerves I propose a... final draft? I hope so i ended up mulling this one over quiet a bit. Here's hoping why sad grasp of grammar and spelling doesn't rear its ugly head Eliot: Here are my last rounds of edits. Things I changed: -Indents. They are your friend and make the work flow a bit more smoothly, aesthetically speaking. -Same for doublespacing--allows you to take in more words at once and slows your reading speed aloud. - Added page numbers and STANDARD MANUSCRIPT FORMAT for submissions. - Some minor tense issues tweaked - Removed some adverbs in the descriptions--letting your atmosphere do more of the heavy lifting. I think its ready, after this anyway. FINAL TRAP REVISIONS 2016.pdf (111.67 KB)
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Dec 27, 2016 17:56:08 GMT
Post by eldercheese on Dec 27, 2016 17:56:08 GMT
nice I'll check it out. What do you mean indents you me tabbing the first line of a paragraph? I do do that I was in English 101 in high school with you charlie... or was I? did we ever have bill together? Also its way to quiet here. We need to get Zombie back in here I'll send some feelers out to a person or two that I know. when next we get together I will have to make a site page on face book and I'll put our forum info on it. Its been so long I'm not sure how to do that... SCIENCE!!!
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Dec 27, 2016 20:19:35 GMT
Post by Charlie Allison on Dec 27, 2016 20:19:35 GMT
nice I'll check it out. What do you mean indents you me tabbing the first line of a paragraph? I do do that I was in English 101 in high school with you charlie... or was I? did we ever have bill together? Also its way to quiet here. We need to get Zombie back in here I'll send some feelers out to a person or two that I know. when next we get together I will have to make a site page on face book and I'll put our forum info on it. Its been so long I'm not sure how to do that... SCIENCE!!! Yes, Eliot--you tab the first line of a paragraph. Like a civilized person. I know, it's very quiet on here--but we'll pick it up, as you say, with SCIENCE!
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Dec 30, 2016 14:05:35 GMT
Post by justin1023 on Dec 30, 2016 14:05:35 GMT
Eliot, this is awesome man! For shits and giggles, go back to the first draft you posted, then look at this last version with Charlie's minimal, final edits. Crazy how far a story can come. Aside from what Charlie already has outlined in his last been of edits, I have nothing more to add. My red pen has been put away. Hats off to you, sir, for your persistence and for a good story!
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Jan 1, 2017 15:13:51 GMT
Post by eldercheese on Jan 1, 2017 15:13:51 GMT
Thanks for all your help man I'm going to be reading it with charlie today. There is still one edit I need to do that he suggested then I'm done. You've been a huge help now onto the next project
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