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Post by Rie Webster on May 28, 2016 18:16:21 GMT
Animal Sanctuary is the overall theme for a series of shorts I am planning on writing. With only two or three of the shorts finished, there is a lot to be done on this. The basic premise is that there is an animal sanctuary where you have animals such as The Bad News Bears, Drama Llamas, a Hobby Horse, etc and it follows the shenanigans of the various animals and their keepers.
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Post by Rie Webster on May 28, 2016 18:18:51 GMT
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Post by Charlie Allison on May 28, 2016 18:33:38 GMT
Reading tomorrow morning So glad I get to read these stories again
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Post by Charlie Allison on May 29, 2016 14:29:41 GMT
Animal Sanctuary is the overall theme for a series of shorts I am planning on writing. With only two or three of the shorts finished, there is a lot to be done on this. The basic premise is that there is an animal sanctuary where you have animals such as The Bad News Bears, Drama Llamas, a Hobby Horse, etc and it follows the shenanigans of the various animals and their keepers. Rie, Alright lets do this! Strengths of the work: -Title-flex. Basically, the title of the work provides a lure--and a silent punchline. It's a testament to 'Bad News Bears' that you make this style work. -Tight format. the story is under five hundred words (I guess making it technically flash fiction). You don't waste any words - In relation to that last point, actually, I love the use of archetypes. You don't bother giving the prince a name because he doesn't need one. Neither do his family members--they are cogs that churn ceaselessly towards the 'wham line'. -Eminently quotable work. Here are two of my favorite quotes from this piece: and the first sentence sets the scene perfectly--because of this, you really don't need to waste time building atmosphere as much as someone else might: Suggestions: Really, Rie, the only thing I can suggest are superficial, since, in my mind, this is a very strong work. -Length. Right now, this story is easily about to compete (and probably win) flash fiction contests. If you wanted to pad this story out to a thousand words or two thousand, you could do it and enter it as a short story. However, its certainly not my intent to tell you what to do with this story--just letting you know you have the option of expansion. Charlies Line Notes Bad news bears.pdf (22.93 KB)
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